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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

Initial hook: stumbled onto this item while searching "Registered User", this bulletin was the only result. As luck would have it, it's your Anniversary! *yay*

Atmosphere/Tone: curious, entreating, polling

What I liked: the aforethought needed to create this item for future interests

A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

Since I am a preferred author but I am not a moderator, that doesn't show up on my list.
what is the 'that' of which you speak? after a minute of thinking I believe it's either "Preferred authors and higher only" or more likely the unlisted "Moderators and higher only"; may want to specify

if I were to review your story, ...would you mind if I were to put a link to your story on my blog and include the same review that I already sent to you?
That would be fine with me, so long as there was a link back to my original item and maybe even my profile.

A few parting comments...
It also may be worth noting that even if someone does have a restriction on an item they may not mind having it shared on an external site if asked and be willing to change the restriction some time in the future.