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| (4.5)| A pleasant hour Valenchia   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" I'm a friend here Samberine Everose I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here again giving you a review. I hope I can bring you a smile. Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.  WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:Title: Every title of a piece is one of its important element,because it is the first part in which a prospective reader have their first glance, so a title should have a magnetic charm to hook a reader. The title of your piece is simple to me, but it hook me, because the imagery that it gives, Who cannot attracted to an ice cream, or enticed on it..? Imagery - a well crafted words if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery. The proper chosen of words to expressed or to showed the intentionally meaning of the piece can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions. This is just only a short piece but you already showed it here, the delicious and colorful cold imagery of sweet ice cream. Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and it is also fun to create, even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented. This is a form of Haiku and no rhyming been presented and needed, but the rhythm and metric is required, you did it well.  MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.  And no doubt arise.  MY FINAL REFLECTION :Delicious sweet ice cream always keep us cool, specially in a hot tropical climate. Well done. Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Everyone have its own gift and talent, God made us unique. Its within us, if we want to improve and share. So write on,  and always share this wonderful talent you have. Until next time. ** Image ID #1979236 Unavailable **  
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You responded to this review 05/30/2014 @ 8:18pm EDT