Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...This is the second of your three reviews from the Zodiac Auction.

First impressions...I was looking forward to reading about Aquarians, being that i am one as well. I was not disappointed at all. The descriptions are spot on!

Was the title interesting...The whole reason I read this was because of the title.

Was the content rating appropriate...Nothing above an "e" in this piece.

Did you use a specific form of poetry...Not a particular form, I believe a quatrain with aabb rhyme scheme.

Did you follow the form...yes.

Was there a rhyme scheme- what was it...yes, aabb

Did the rhymes seem forced...the rhymes did seem a bit forced in this piece. In particular the line;

but forgiveness we offer, first.

You seem to have put the sentence together to be able to use the word 'first'. Don't worry I have done the same thing, totally rearranging a great sentence structure to get a certain word into the rhyme scheme.

Were words forced to fit syllable count...no

Was there rhythm and flow...I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of your piece.

Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...I noted no errors in any of these areas.

Things I would change...I think I would go back and rework some of the lines so that the sentence structure is maintained while still being able to have the rhyme scheme of aabb.

Favorite parts/lines...These were my favorites mainly because they fit me to a 't'

We may have a bit of hot temper,
But promise it won't last long, either.
Just give us a minute to unwind,
We would rather be charming and kind.

Great job, and of course this whole review is purely my opinion, use what you can and throw out the rest!


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