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 Review #4023227 |
 Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC.  This is a Simply Positive Review. You are so right. There are times that we are so busy with everyday life, jobs, chores tending to family through the years, that we may actually miss out on some beautiful things in life. Taking time to notice surroundings beyond the usual family duties, is a wonderful way to appreciate the total picture.   To think your children have had many pets, yet you never had the time to notice the cats when they were just kittens. That is the way life is. Children grow up so fast as well as the family pets. Life is constantly changing, we all evolve into our new roles as we age and our kids have gone on their own.Observation The poem was one of rhyme and for the most part rhythm, although there were a few lines that were more verbose, making it a little bumpy along the way. I noticed it more in the last stanza of the poem. It just seemed lengthy and sluggish in the rhythm department. "The soft sound of purring tells of no fear ever to be Oh, what I've been missing, it's amazing to me." These are the last two lines of the poem, you want to end with impact and an easy flow.  TRY: The soft sound of purrs, says she has no fears Oh, what I've missed, through all of these years. Just a quick example of shortening the words yet giving them more lyrical impact.  Otherwise, well done!  Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 08/04/2014 @ 9:29pm EDT