Hi there tommymarx65,

I found your poem while clicking on "random reviews".... I hope you don't mind if I comment on your poem today.

Personal Impression: I found myself relating with your analogy of repairing and covering up damage which accumulates over time. Of course, you were writing about more than walls in a room. I visualized the healing processes of the psyche of an individual also undergoes life's many trials and tribulations over time. The ending alludes to the opposite of the belief, "surviving the burdens of life only make us stronger." This holds a darker implication that too many burdens can break a psyche down and weaken the will of an individual. I was reminded of the recent loss of a well known comedian who struggled with depression throughout his life.



Tone & Mood An instructive as well as a reminiscing tone. I pictured a craftsman busy with reburbishing as well as demonstrating to another how to make the repairs with care and patience.

Rhyme, Form & Flow There was no rhyme pattern, but the flow of the poem was not hampered by the lack. The poem read smoothly and followed a consecutive order.


Emotional Impact I visualized my own life of spackle and paint repairs. Sometimes, massive damage in the form of traumatic experience can leave a gaping huge hole which takes massive spackle applied in small repetitive sessions. The first application reduces the size of the hole, but doesn't cover the hole--wait until dried--add the next application--wait until dried--repeat until the hole is completely filled. Sometimes a screen or gauze may be applied to aid in the spackle sticking and reinforcing the repair.


Grammar/Punctuation One question mark was used with the single question asked in the poem, otherwise the poem was without punctuation. The flow of the read was instead established by the wording of each line in the stanzas.



Poetry Devices Each stanza basically made a statement in the first line and each line then support the statement. I liked how each stanza progressed.


Thank you for sharing and allowing me to review your work. I hope my comments were helpful.

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