Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This is an excellent story of the expression of inner thoughts and feelings. Writing stories is an excellent way to express that. This is well written with only a few errors. I will send a format suggestion by email. The style is easy to read.

Characterization: A person who is not named. This first person account is dynamic in voice and mood. The tone is dark while remaining hopeful.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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