Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This is a well told story of a sister's relationship with her brother. It is packed with emotion and teaches what life is about.

Characterization: Annie tells the story. Her account pulls the reader into the action. The interaction with her brother Alex is well done filled with warmth, frustration, and understanding. The interaction with a stranger is well done.

Dialogue: I enjoyed the dialogue, and it advances the story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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