Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: A prologue that works well will give the reader some ideas of the setting and some of the characters so that the reader will desire to keep reading the story.

Your prologue is like a history, and while history may be interesting, it, may not appeal to some readers. I would suggest to work in your history in bit and pieces into the main body of your story. Take a look at Robert Jordan. He has tons of history in his Wheel of Time series, but it does not read like history. He does this by having a character ask a question of another character. Such as "What is this statue all about?" Then the character will give the details that the reader might need to know. In this manner, it no longer reads as history but as part of the narrative.


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