Hey, Unapologetic Poetess . Please note that this review represents my views as a reader and is not meant to offend in any manner.


The poem talks about the comparison of pleasures of company the protag enjoyed during night and the horrors of darkness intruding in life during day. How many times we have woken up in similar scenarios? And nothing will blot these horrors out from our mind.



You have used free form in the poem. I couldn't find you focussed on any poetic device. I just found a small error in one line of the poem. Your presence there was a comfort - The word "there" seems unnecessary here. Sentence would be fine without it as well.


I didn't find any issue with the punctuation.


Nothing stood out as favorite or non-favorite.


Although I didn't find any problem with the poem here, I don't think it'll stay by me for a long time. A poem can be made powerful with the poetic devices. Try using them and you'll see the difference in your poetry.

I also wondered why you named it "Kali"? "Kali" in hindi means black or Goddesss, but why the language change? Why not call it simply darkness.

Please understand that poetry is quite a subjective thing. Each reader sees different things and prefers different ways. I've just iterated what I felt.

Thanks for sharing this poem.

Keep Writing!

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