Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This is a delightful story of a mermaid. I like the creative idea, and how it is developed. The setting and character could use even more descriptive development. The story flows well and is easy to read.

Characterization: The mermaid is not named. Her account is interesting, and her interaction with the world makes for a good story.

Dialogue: Good dialogue that advances the story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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