There is some good research done in this essay. I feel it is lacking a bit in structure. For example, the opening paragraph should state the points that you will cover in the essay and these should be mention briefly. There should also be a conclusion to wrap the essay up. I feel this essay lacked an opening paragraph and a conclusion paragraph. I will be posting a website at the end of my review here which goes over 10 steps to writing an essay. Another aspect of social media to consider is facebook, instagram, twitter, youtube, and pininterest are some popular social media sites to visit. Is there a difference in how much time is spent on line with certain media devices? For example, is cell phones used more than desk top computers and if so why is that? Are laptops used more often than tablets? Where are the parents in all of this? Do they approve of their kids spending so much time online or do they even care? Do the parents even know what these types of sites can do to their children? Overall, the writing you have here is pretty good I feel all it needs is to be expanded more is all than it will be much better. Write on and good luck in English. Also welcome to WDC





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