This is a good chapter. There is good descriptions and I like the characters you have developed here. You have created some mystery when some of the characters asked your main character who she is. I do not think she has told them the whole story and I feel those know this too great job here. Suggestions for improvements, the only thing I have is there are a few grammar errors other than that I feel it is great as it is. Overall, great job. Welcome to WDC.





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