Author: Norhafizah Manaf
Reviewer: Cobe

Hi! I found this piece on the "read a newbie" page and was interested by the title. I'm here to give you a review in affiliation with "RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group"  as part of a challenge for "a very Wodehouse challenge"  . I am just another writer like you, so take what you can use and ignore the rest. Only you know what is best for your piece.

In General: This is written in a way that pulls the reader through a long period of time, the length of a child's life, and yet sticks to a single theme without being dull or seeming to miss parts. It kept me reading to the end. The theme of motherhood resonates with anyone who has ever been a mother or ever wanted to be a mother and probably a few dads out there as well. It is an emotional subject, which in my opinion, makes it harder to write about. But you've done a good job.

Flow: This flows well from one section to the next, keeping in mind the theme from beginning to end. You haven't strayed from the point or lingered too long on any one section. Well done!

Grammar: This is pretty good with only an occasional missing word or added "s". I'm not a great grammar guru so I'll leave that to others on the site who are.

Overall: I like this and can definitely identify with it. It made me think of all the things I went through with my own children and how it ties parents everywhere together no matter where they live.

Happy Writing and welcome to WDC!!

Cobe

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .