First Thoughts: I am reviewing "Invalid Item"  for "I Write in December-January-February" . The first paragraph hooked me with the first sentence describing the sound of iron slamming against iron. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

What I liked: I like this metaphor, mocking pretense of hope, because it is fresh and descriptive.

Suggestions For Improvement: A typo in this phrase, weak from hungry and lack of water, I suggest changing hungry to hunger because it is a better fit in the context of the sentence.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story. Write on.




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .