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 Sin Open in new Window. [ASR]
My first attempt at free form. Companion piece to "Virtue"
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Interesting that I just read your poem about 'transgressions' and now to Seven Deadly Sins; each stanza features an excellent description of the sin with a message of how to avoid the sin. i could select a favorite line from each description and turn that into another poem just as fabulous. It's a passing idea; you might try it as the concluding stanza tying all the seven sins together.

I like the way you described 'pride' "The one from which other sins spring" while the description of each of the six does fit what you said about pride.

Great work. No very many poets would even try this yet you are amazingly successful with it. Way to GO!

ann

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