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 Review #4090495 |
 "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" Hello there, wanagi This is a Simply Positive Review!   Your poem induced brilliant images in my mind's eye. I loved the whole concept of "clipping the moon," leaving a mere crescent of it left, with the words of an incomplete book. It also leaves the chance of completing the book, thus filling the crescent moon, letting it wax until full -- complete book, new story, better ending.   I enjoyed the meticulously chosen words that melded together within the lines to create a rhythmic sound to the ears. Good use of assonance, consonance and sibilance. Observations: "free to drift along the crisp currents of his dried up dreams. Lost in the rustling screams above the colored sea of golden orange, red, and yellow trees of grey mourning." The two shorter lines stick out in this stanza, since they are below lines that are lengthy. Perhaps splitting the longer lines, (especially the second last line, as it is quite wordy in comparison) in a way to even them out, and make the flow a little more smoother.  Otherwise, well done! Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 02/25/2015 @ 9:59pm EST