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There was a hint of humour in this tale although it wasn't actually a funny story. But I had to root for the narrator and her quest to put things right in her neighbourhood even if her methods were, of course, questionable. I liked her voice as she narrated the events; she made no excuses, it simply was what it was. The part where she revealed the motivation behind her desire for vengeance, beyond the obvious one of wanting to restore some peace and quiet back to her street, was poignant and the brevity with which she mentioned it was quite interesting and defined her character well.

At first, it wasn’t even clear who the narrator might be. I was enjoying the beautiful descriptions in the first paragraph where you did a good job allowing the readers to picture the setting. The second paragraph changed direction a little but it was the fourth one that took me by surprise. I had just pictured the narrator as an old lady watching the sunset when you shot this little missile at me,

I don’t believe in killing for the sake of killing

With hindsight, the narrator's voice was so well done that I should have seen it coming, but since I hadn't, I simply enjoyed the twist at that point.

The battle scenes were again well described and easy to imagine, and the ending was excellent. You didn't say if she got away with it or if her real reason for hiding in the treehouse was eventually exposed, but it would work well with the rest of the story if no one discovered what she had done.

The writing was very good and on a second read I took the time to pay particular attention to the tone and how well it worked for this kind of tale. This is an excellent story, I'm glad I found it! *Smile*


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