Greetings, Elle ! Thank you for submitting your entry in the "Writing 4 Kids" .

What great imagery! I absolutely love the idea of a giant throwing a tantrum and the narrator feeling sorry for him. I'm sure children would also enjoy this, especially with vivid illustrations to accompany it. Nice job!

My only suggestion is in the 4th Stanza, Line 1, you've written Rains patters lightly. It may just be a typo, but perhaps you meant either: Rain spatters lightly... Rains patter slightly... or something else. Not a big deal at all.

Great work, Elle. You are obviously familiar with children's writing. It shows.

Favorite lines...

like a giant throwing a tantrum,
tossing clouds as he shouts and cries. - What a great visual!

Have a great day and
K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .