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Hi Siobhan Falen Author Icon,

I decided to read your story today and get some tips, ideas, and inspiration from it. Like always your stories never let me down *Thumbsup*. I enjoyed this piece of horror very much.

I felt like the story was an abstract of a larger story which I thought you wrote very well since there was no single part I didn't understand. It was about Satan possessing the body of someone's husband to get his wife, right? I liked the idea very much. Simple but very well narrated, spooky and with more showing than telling.

I liked very many lines among the few I have mentioned below:
*Starbl*His shriek tangled in his throat. I think His should be A
*Starbl*Eerie white orbs...burned into her...probe the very corners of her soul.
I actually saw every behavior of the characters very clearly. Maybe you can give me lessons on that . . .

The only thing I suggest you look into is maybe the title. The Invitation is also very appropriate since Dana had ignored Satan's invitation. But I'm thinking something like Haunted. Anyways, that's just my very personal opinion.

Overall, a wonderful story. Congrats on the win and write on!
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