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Review #4136187
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 Silver Lining Open in new Window. [E]
words of comfort
by Miwli Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Poet : Miwli Author Icon
Poem : "Silver Lining" Open in new Window.

*BurstV*Subject
Your poem is about a conversation between two people who, I believe, are a couple. One feels pessimistic - he shouldn't reach for things they can't have and he feels that the heart grows weary of every blow and tries desperately to mend the broken pieces. However, his partner replies simply that it only makes the heart stronger in doing so.

Your piece was simple yet beautiful in its meaning. Indeed the heart breaks more than it heals, but every time we make the effort to mend ourselves, we grow stronger. Your poem had a lot of layers to it and I liked the contrast with the simplicity of it.

*BurstB*Imagery
Your hook had some great imagery and it served well to pull me into your piece. Your poem's atmosphere was one of sad longing - it was like the man wanted desperately to believe in love but his past failures held him back. The woman with that last line changed the tone of the poem and it ended the verse on a hopeful note.

*BurstB*Form
Occasionally rhymed, free form for the most part
Poetic devices - Metaphors and assonance
Flow and coherence - *Thumbsup*

*BurstG*Style of writing
Simple and easy to understand

*BurstO*Suggestions
on ears so deaf and And then she said - These two phrases didn't fit in well with the overall tone of your piece. Please consider rewording them.

*BurstO*Favourite part
The heart may break and heal again
but never it grows fonder

*Heart* Beautiful and true

*BurstR*Final thoughts
Your poem was an interesting read about two different perspectives on love. I liked the way you've used simple words to convey a lot of meaning in this piece. I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing. Welcome to WDC *Smile*

Good luck with your writing and have a great day!

-TG *Suitspade*

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