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 | The Least Redeeming Friendship Ever  [18+] A painful recounting of a friendship gone bad and what I learned.  |
| (4.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !Author : tnt410 Story : "The Least Redeeming Friendship Ever"  Story Your story is about the events in your life that have taught you to be the person you are now. From an abusive relationship with your father to a horrible phase in your life with a drug dealer, you've chosen to take the high road. You've learned that the bed you've chosen to make was a life free from drug addiction. This opened your eyes to who you thought was your idol - even in death, he taught you that you'd made the right choice by picking a life without him.  Perhaps it's my twisted perception of the world speaking, but I have a great deal of respect for people who can admit that they did drugs but found the courage to realise they were more worth than that. This story hooked me from the first line - you call things the way you see it and until now, I've only ever seen one person do that here (he's currently my best friend on WDC, I can throw in an introduction later on if you like.) I'll tell you what I told him - your style of writing feels real. You don't polish it up with pretty words, you call the shots the way they are and that makes for compelling stories in the dark genre. Characters Your character development was hopeful - I know it could've gone either way seeing all the cards you were dealt. Your character showed courage, not just from overcoming drugs itself, but from the little things. You didn't back down from your father's abuse, you tried to find the good in a very bad deal with a drug addict and even later on, after you see him for who he is, you still try to find good in him. This tells me your character is the kind that believes in optimism, though more like vague dream more than a reality. And that takes courage - to remain optimistic in the worst of situations demands great courage. Descriptions and dialogue Your story is autobiographical in nature. I'll admit my mind is wired to expect dry and lack lustre writing when I hear the word easy. Your hook cleared up any confusion in that department - you did a really good job of telling your readers this essay was going to be different. You don't go in-depth into any of the events but the way you describe them was what made me read on. You hit everything, even serious matters that require no smiles, with a tinge of sarcasm which makes it interesting for the reader.  Style of writing POV - First person Tense - Past Descriptive, immersive, and engaging  Errors/Typos had and still do I think you mean had and still don't downs hair neatly - Normally, I'm not picky on punctuation but this paragraph (not just this line) lacked a few commas - please mail me if you need help proofreading. jagged edge - Repetition of edge slowed down the flow here. Favourite part "Living well really is the best revenge" Amen   Final thoughts Your piece was an inspiring and hard hitting piece - you must've confronted quite a few old demons with this one. I applaud you for the way you write without flinching - your breed of authors fascinate me in that you deliver on the page with nothing holding you back. Thank you for sharing and welcome to our community. Good luck with your writing and have a great day! -TG  ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 07/11/2015 @ 6:33pm EDT