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Howdy, Narrative!
This isn't bad so far, but there's something called showing vs. telling, and you seem to be telling a lot more here than showing. I know it's unfinished (a lot of your stories are so far), and the spelling and grammar are pretty clean, but I'd like to see you finish this one; I'm hoping there's a ghost in here somewhere.
Thanks for sharing this, N.F.
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