Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

What I like: I enjoyed the easy reading style of this interesting story.

Opening: The first paragraph sets the scene quite well. The reader is pulled into the story and held attentive until the end.

Plot: the story is idea is developed quite well. My only suggestion is that at the end Death says, “. . . Anyway, see you soon!” I think this could be used to give the story an added twist.

Dialogue: good dialogue that advances the story.

Characters: Interesting characters that make for a fun read.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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