Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

What I like: A smooth flowing style that makes for easy reading. A detailed story that adds solid textures to the read.

Opening: The first paragraphs set up the story well and draw the reader into the story.

Plot: the story idea is well developed.

Style and Voice: the first person narrative adds to the story.

Scene/Setting: the setting is well done.

Characters: the main character is very well established.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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