Hello MontyB

This is a review for "Black Magic Birthday Review Bash" 

Plot

It can be difficult to formulate much of a plot in flash fiction but you have a definite beginning, middle and end here concluding with the confession.


Characters

Having only 3 characters works well in this flash fiction story as too many would make it complicated to read. I like the way you have created a schizophrenic main character as the twist (Well I am guessing this is the case!)


What I liked

The setting and the dialogue feel very realistic and set the scene. Your description and expression of the girls emotions is effective, it is a good response to the prompt


Suggestions

"The couldn't seem to" - A typo probably but should be "they"


Well written flash fiction - good luck in the contest!



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