Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

What I like: A quick paced story filled with action.

Opening: The first few paragraphs set up the story well. The reader is pulled into the action.

Style and Voice: An easy reading style.

Scene/Setting: The setting is well done.

Dialogue: good dialogue that advances the story.

Characters: The main character is well presented. The interaction with the other characters advances the story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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