Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

What I like: A compelling story with a strong character.

Opening: the opening paragraph presents the character and sets the scene.

Plot: the idea is well presented.

Style and Voice: An easy reading style. The first person voice makes for a strong character.

Scene/Setting: good details make for a good setting.

Dialogue: good dialogue that advances the story.

Characters: the main character is well done. The interaction with the other characters makes for an interesting story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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