Hi Lilviscious ,



First impression:

This is a well-written flash piece that holds off on revealing itself right until the very end.

General impressions:

Writing a sub-100 word piece of flash fiction isn't easy. You have a nice little story here that holds the reader through to the end, and there is a great reveal as to your story's crux.

There is a nice build-up and you show your scene nicely. The reader can easily visualise the party atmosphere and hear the loud music reverberating from the speakers.

I love the way the reveal is done. In drabbles (sub-100 word flash pieces) the key is how the reveal is done. It is very tempting to do the reveal at the mid-way point and then try to somehow include it in your story. A well-executed drabble should have about 75 words of story, followed by the reveal, followed by "The end" and roll the credits. This is what you have done really well

Closing remarks:

I love reading flash fiction. Not because it's short and only takes a few minutes to read, but because I love seeing what authors can pull off with 500 words, 200 words, or in this case sub-100 words.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!



Andy~hating university