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Echoed cold  [E] Life unscripted 2  |
| (4.0)  Welcome to WDC kylezx! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I loved the sound evoked in your title with its hard sound and awkward flow. I think it reflects an emotional moment. Your weaving has a strong atmosphere with a sad and philosophical tone. It was pleasant to read aloud with its effective sound elements and free style, which suited the theme and emotional content. I could imagine the regret and emptiness after the loss from your evocative imagery and message. It is a relevant topic and accessible to any who have had loss--the idea of regret and sadness about what is lost. "Cancer took more.." is potent. The free style had little rhyme but had a wonderful inner soundscape that helped tie it together. The imagery of water, shell and sword really work. I liked the beginning with the personal image and feeling and ending with the reflective message as if one comes to terms.I think you need to drop the comma after "took more" as it seems to go with the next phrase. Thanks for sharing this heartfelt expression.  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar 
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