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| Hello, inky14dinky! Thanks for your entry to "The Humorous Poetry Contest"  [18+]. I enjoyed reading your entry! I liked how it told a full story of two little girls one day. It describe the scene really well which is hard to do with poetry, and I had no problem visualizing what was going on as they faced a scary situation.  Good job on the rhyming. This moved the poem along at a good pace, and the word choice was strong to give a better picture of how the girls felt and what was happening around them. I only paused at a couple of things that I had to read over. I think it has to be established a little clearer that the dog snatches the doll, because I got a little lost as to had the doll. Other than that niggle, it was a fun read. Overall, I liked the way it was written, and it kept my attention from the beginning to the end! Thanks for the support of the contest with your entry.  ~Lornda ** Animated Images For Use By Premium+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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