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by Lisa Noe Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "An Old Treehouse" Open in new Window.
Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Lisa Noe Author Icon!
Thanks for your entry to
"The Humorous Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. [18+].


*Star* I enjoyed reading your poem! It told a cute little story about a family living in a treehouse. I thought that was a humorous concept for a poem. It starts off setting the scene about the dad and continues to tell us about his life. *Cool*

*Star* I thought it told a complete story which is hard to come across in a poem, so good job with adding all of the details. I did pause at a few spots along the way. I'm not sure if it's a comma placement issue or that some areas have to be tightened up, because the pace just seemed off along the way. I think by reading it out loud you'll be able to catch them to smooth it out.

*Star* Overall, I liked the story and how it focused in on the father. It had humorous and emotional elements which helped tell us about the main character. Even though he had struggles, he was able to look after his kids -- and all this while living in a treehouse. *Laugh* Thanks for supporting the contest!

~Lornda

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