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Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Star* This is a funny take on the whole theory of "Love is Blind"! I had to laugh at how all that worked out. *Laugh* It starts of with a bang and just keeps going from there to the humorous last verse. *Cool*

*Star* The word choice had me going that's for sure. The description had me looking like this . . . almost *Pointright* *Vomit* The reading of it only slowed down for me in one spot, and I'm not sure if you can change it, but it's a matter of word choice. In the third verse, first line, I wonder if replacing the first part with something stronger would add to the humor at this point: It looks bad, it smells, A descriptive word for 'It looks bad' would give a better visual, and 'it smells' has already been established in the previous verse by using the same word 'smell'. So, just something to think about to add a bit of a punch.

*Star* Overall, I had a fun time reading it! I liked how it slowly worked up into to a funny last verse to give the real meaning to Love is Blind. *Wink* Thanks for supporting the contest!

~Lornda

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