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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star* I enjoyed reading your entry! The first verse sets the scene well, and it was funny to see how the events unfolded. It tells a fun little story, and ends in a humorous way! *Cool*

*Star* The rhyming made the reading smooth and added to the comedy. I did pause at a couple of places, and I think it's just a matter of a stronger descriptive word choice. For instance, in the first verse, the repeat of the word 'door' weighs it down a tad, because it's already been established about the door in the previous line.

*Star* I had fun reading this cute poem! I had no problem visualizing what this little guy was doing, and was surprised by the reaction of the kid. It made for a funny punchline. Way to go! Thanks for supporting the contest with your entry. *Bigsmile*

~Lornda

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