Greetings, PureSciFi ! Thank you for entering "The Writer's Cramp" !

Prompt: I was watching the bob of his Adam's apple when I realized that . . .

Oh! I wasn't expecting that at all! How interesting! An alien who is both male and female. When they are male, they have a throat ball. When they are female, they do not have a throat ball. I would never have thought of this! You are very clever! It would seem I would have caught on by your title, lol. I guess I thinking there were two sides to the story... which, in a way, there were!

The only thing that really stuck out at me was the part when Cobbec killed ten others by himself. 1 to 10 seems a bit miraculous, but perhaps if you add how he was able to accomplish this, it might explain it better.

I thought the names of your characters fit rather well! And your dialogue is great. This is something you could certainly use in a future piece. I also enjoyed the larger text and the courier font. Nice job.

I liked this visual very much:
Paile looked at the papers in her hand again. She flipped back and forth between three of them several times. “What happened to get you transferred here?”

Best of luck in the contest!

Have a great day and...
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")


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