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| (3.5)| I'm Samberine Everose your little fairy friend here in WDC.  and I'm here to give you a review as my  to you for being here.. By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being a registered Author here in this wonderful World of Writing Dot Com.  I hope you will enjoy sharing your writings as well as finding your way up here.Please remember that I'm not expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion and thoughts, who just like to read bits and pieces. Please try to chew and just ignore, if doesn't fit to your taste.  THE TITLE-While I'm flapping my little wings into the newbies Corner, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because the title seems to be interesting, its just only one word but the created imagery have a curious effect. Jealous gave a negative imagery, its a feeling of envy, but maybe depends on the situation. Jealous maybe fine in a relationship, specially couple, because that will range how deep the person's love can be. Good job, because the title hooked me as your reader.   A title in poetry should be captivating to attract or enticed a reader, because a title serve as the main door before entering to the main body. This is where the first impression and expectation was created into a prospective reader.THE BODY- I can say that the words scribbled are light, few, easy to grasp, or in other word- Simple. I like its simplicity, easy to grasp its for everybody. The emotion is there already. And I can feel it. But remember that Poetry can be in few words or lines, but the word to choose should be compact and create an impact to reader. Words should be stimulate the emotion.  COMMENTS AND SUGGESTION:I suggest that you can try words that are compact, words that are firm. Combining two words that are well chosen or mixing them can create a powerful impact to readers. Thank you for sharing this piece, I am looking forward to read more of your works again. Until next reviewing, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing. Regards,    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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