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BLACKBIRD
by M.Prelooker

E-Two-#blowme

Chapter-10-profiler needed

Later the same night and it's before midnight because Fred is still on duty. So what, about three hours later?

>>> just to get the breaking news if we screwed up and the school blows up.
Good to keep the tension and remind us about the situation.

>>> We'll meet you there after checking these kids' home addresses.
'there' is where? And 'you' is Fred? There are several people talking so it gets hard to follow.

>>> “Check their online pictures: who're the one that always stays at the bottom of the group, the one physically smaller, or weaker, he might be the one with better grades...maybe. I don't know,
That sounds like basic profiling. Tanya is good if she knows what to look for, but maybe not know what something means.

>>> But maybe the brain was the leader...or the wingman...Shit, she didn't have a clue!
I think the dynamics are different with teenagers---but are the leaders of this program experienced adults who are manipulating the kids? There's a lot that is still unknown.

>>> Oh, well, I asked my hacker son to find out where you were staying because I mean to...Yeah, sure.
She actually contemplated calling Brock for a few minutes.

>>> Well, the day he felt as kind as to forgive her
Feels awkward, how about:
>>> Well, the day he felt kind enough to forgive her.

>>> The team, Hank included, knew that voice: it meant that if Hank insisted, he was about to spend the next month cleaning toilets, or worse.
That's the cool thing about the team. Gillian has the discipline when she needs it and they respect that.

The radio talk is clear and logical as they watch each of the four target houses.

>>> “I’m in position,” grunted Hank then. “And this place is lighted up like a damned Christmas tree, there’s light in every frigging window.”
This is the home of the only girl. Maybe she's the gang leader? Or more simply, her folks are not home, so they gathered there

FINAL COMMENT: I would like to believe that their guesses are not perfect and some of the ones chosen are not involved. Profiling or not, it's a lucky guess. I don't think this process should be too easy or perfect, ya know?
Gillian maybe right that the leader will not go on this night mission. Whatever, we're one step closer to catching these guys.

Best, Gale




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