Hello, chip
Thank you for sharing your work.

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I am reviewing your writing because: Well, you asked me, and I am very happy to do so. The title caught my attention, and while when I was little, The Birds freaked me out, I was very interested in how you were going to play out this story.

The tone you've set: Like the subjects, it reminds me of an old black and white detective show. I picture the scenery in my mind in black and white. Even the details you give don't really alter the colors in my mind, which is cool. Heck, I can even see this being typed out on an old style typewriter by the detective.

How I feel about your work: This is the first time that I've reviewed any of your work, and I'm glad that I got to read your story. It is well thought out and executed. The twists and turns of the plot had me hooked all the way to the end. Even the story feels like a police report. The fact that you made the Hitchcock brothers a little shady, being involved with arson was a twist I did not expect.

I wonder about: The only thing that gave me pause was information being loaded on a "laptop". That gave a little bit of pause, however; the story was well played enough that I was able to go past it with only a bit of a pause given the way the story was laid out.

Suggestions I have: That would be the only suggestion I have, is maybe "old fashioned" sleuthing (with perhaps a "lucky break") as opposed to using a laptop, or perhaps not making the story quite so "black and white". This is only a suggestion, but I really do like the black and white feel of the story.

Overall: I was very pleased with your writing. I hope to look into more of your work in the future. Keep up the great job.

sincerely,

amyjo

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