Hello, Hatesmondays Thank you for sharing your work.
I am reviewing your writing because: You've requested a review from the Power Reviewer's Group, so here I am ! The tone you've set: Your teacher must have a lot of fun with your papers. Rather than just answering Yes or No, you go in with both sides of the argument, and defend both sides, giving examples on why you gave such an answer. That is very thorough work, and in the future should serve you well. How I feel about your work: After reading your assignment, it looks like you were a little heavy on the "no" side of the argument, but that is perfectly fine. Your writing shows that you have done some research and have thought about an answer to the question, and not merely threw something together just to get homework done. Bravo! I liked the examples you gave, both in real life, and from Star Trek. I also like how you took the real human emotions into account as well. I wonder about: The only thing I really wonder is how your argument would have been structured if you had really been for the experimental operation. Both sides were argued well, but I get the feeling you were really against the operation. Suggestions I have: I really don't have anything to add to your paper. The grammar and wording had no issues. You gave a reasonable response to both sides of the question. Overall:You make me want to go find this book and read it for myself. I think there was a movie made about this story as well, but I am not sure. I've heard of this story, but have never read it. Thank you for sharing your paper. Keep up the good work - both here and in school! sincerely, amyjo ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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