Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work. I will be reviewing for the Anniversary reviews as well as the Mad Dash.

My first impression: I believe that you have a wonderful fantasy in the making. You have brought the characters to life, and I can feel the evil oozing from Vergris as I continued reading. Then on the opposite side of the spectrum, you have Raynar and Azriel. Young and innocent caught up in the fight between good and evil.

Other thoughts: I have enjoyed reading what you've written so far. You paint this fantasy world in vivid colors, and it is easy to picture the scenes you have laid out thus far.

My favorite parts: The condescension of Vergris in his thoughts about those Wizards. You could almost see the disdain that he has for them. Then I enjoyed the apparent friendship and comrade-re between Raynar and Azriel.

Some suggestions: (Keep in mind, these are only my opinions) I did have a question with the following sentence: It has been almost eighteen years since then and since peace his crowning, peace had reigned. I didn't really understand how to read it, especially the highlighted phrase. Perhaps you might take out the word peace before "his crowning"?
I know it is only a prologue, but I am also interested in finding out more about the familiar/companion to Vergris.

Overall: I am ready for more! You got the beginning down, and I cannot wait to see where this may go. I look forward to more from this story and from you as well. Thanks again for sharing such an interesting world.


sincerely,

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