Hi lauraispracticingpiano ,

I read your story and have some comments to offer.

I liked the concept of this story. Disasters happen when people go to extremes. Sometimes we need obstacles to gain our sanity. Jim didn't have an obstacle, no wonder he caused such chaos and killed himself. Great story!

I enjoyed reading about what he did and the characteristics the creatures turned out to have. The end was my favorite part; instead of searching for a solutions for people, he decided to kill himself. that's selfish.

Wonderful story. Write on!




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