I feel that this is a start to a bigger story, it feels like there should be more because it reads like a scene to me. There is description missing of the characters and the surround area where the characters are. I enjoy reading stories from different cultures because I like learning about them. There was lots of well written dialogue here with not a lot of background to help readers who are not familiar with the culture to learn more about it. I do not feel you need to change what you have although adding some things just so the reader can about what you know. I feel this is a good start, thanks for sharing.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .