I love this piece. Your writing is so vivid that I could picture in my mind all that you describe and leave the reader at the end wanting more. I feel this could even be a great idea for a bigger piece if you choose to expand it. Suggestions for improvement are really not much except I could see this as a novel or longer story. Thanks for sharing this well written piece and write on!

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