Review number # 1 of week May5-11

Hi Jean-Pierre

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Essay for Seekers

First Impression: The topic was presented in an organized manner that the reader could easily follow.

What I liked: The author's discussion on the differences between Mohammed and Jesus and why.

What needs your attention: There are multiple places throughout where sentences run on and could be shortened to make your point clearer in this reader's opinion.

Favorite Parts: I enjoyed reading the differences in various approaches to religion and then the featured quotes as the conclusion.

Overall Impression: It is clear to the reader that you researched your topic and gave a lot of thought to your responses. Thank you for sharing examples of how religion can be beneificial.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .