Review number # 5 of week May 5-11th

Hi Christopher,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Sexuality, Feminism and the Coming Crunch

First Impression: The title initially caught my attention and then I became engaged in the reading.

What I liked: The sexual revolution was a farce, we were never intended to be liberated. I agree it was a distraction while other social injustices strengthened their hold on mankind.

What needs your attention: The grammar could be revisited especially the sentences beginning with but other than that nothing distracted the reader.

Favorite Parts: The stakes are to high to play in tea party fashion, actions are necessary to stimulate our economy, protect our environment and humankind as a whole. I agree we do have potential to reach some ideal world order but unfortunately we need to take egos out of the picture and that will be the most difficult goal to reach.

Overall Impression: There is a lot of potential here with some grammar corrections to strengthen your sentences but overall it is thought provoking and enjoyable to read.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




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