Hello Tim Chiu!

I was sent to this piece of yours by the random reviewer button and I remember the dancing woman poem I read earlier. So, when I saw it was your port again I was excited to check out this poem of yours.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
And insatiable, otherworldly beauty-
I would take out the 'And' with the above part.

I hope that this makes sense but I would recommend cutting down excess words, like above, but also this for example:

Somewhat Hardened by experience,
Driven by youthful desires,
wisdom from adult years;

My Favorite Line(s)
A brand new, windswept occurrence –
Another miraculous, chance-filled day -

I really do like the part highlighted above for the imagery and descriptions.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I really enjoyed the love you show for the person you write about in this, her beauty, your cherished reunion, it's all very sweet to read. I enjoyed your use of words and verbs to describe everything and I remember your dancing poem I came across and I really enjoyed your descriptions in that as well.

Overall Comments
Overall, my main suggestion is just trimming down the excess words to increase the potency of your poem. Like 'and, etc.' that may not be needed and I think that this would make it even stronger. I really enjoy how much you convey in this poem of her beauty, how you end up in each other's spirited, warm embrace. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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