Hello Tracey!

It's your friendly neighborhood SB/Sarah Brooks here to say hello and review this bad for you. I'm weird and I really enjoy darker poetry and emotional stuff. So, I was excited to come across this poem of yours.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
charred remains as black as my-
I feel like 'remains' and 'remnants' are a little too close and I'd maybe recommend 'imprints' as another choice. Just a little tinker and suggestion for you to think about.

Rhythm/Rhyming
There are some parts in the first stanza where the syllables maybe sound a little long especially at the end. Besides this I didn't notice any trip ups with reading your poem and this could be just me.

My Favorite Line(s)
A plastered smile, unflinching eyes,
...-

This last stanza was awesome and just really drove your poem home with the message of how you can look so perfect, wrapped in plastic, and have so much hiding under the surface.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I really enjoyed that you tackled this deeper, darker side and did a good job at it. My favorites were the last stanza and how you used so many great words to describe and show us the regret and sorrow.

Overall Comments
Overall, I found this to be a very strong, emotional piece. How we can have so much happen to us, how much can tick under the surface that we just plaster a smile on and tell a person, "hey, watch out for oozing material you may step into if you get too close.' You mention this earlier in a stanza above and just do an awesome job with your descriptions. There are just those few areas I might tinker with but not too much else to add or edit with this piece of yours. I hope that this review is helpful and I'm so glad to come across your works and port again. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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