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why are parents so controlling?
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*NoteV* Story ~
Another story about the family dynamics. Parents can be so frustrating, especially going from teen years into adulthood. This is where boundaries come into play. You feel old enough to do certain things, to push the boundaries set by your parents, and cannot understand why the restrictions are there in the first place. It's our job as parents to make sure our children are safe, and in this world, that's not always an easy thing.
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*NoteV* Issues ~
You have a lot of sentences that start in lower case. I know this is a personal account of an argument, but still remember your sentence structure as you vent. When it comes to the conversational aspects, try giving them their own paragraph separate from your inner thoughts and observations. It will make it easier to read and help keep the flow and order to your thoughts and in your writing.

*green**NoteG* Impressions ~
I can feel how much your are struggling, especially when it comes to being honest with your mother about what you want. The more you close yourself off, and keep your true wants, desires and needs bottled up inside, the harder it will be for you to live a happy life. This is still your journey, your life. Your future is just before you and I'm afraid if you don't start to speak up and explain to your mom what it is you truly want to do with your life, you will feel trapped in a career that will feel stifling for you. Perhaps making a list for your mom to read with all the reasons why you want to go elsewhere for college, with pros and cons, something she can't just brush off. If she sees you've thought it through, maybe you will be able to reach her. I know it's difficult to upset our parents. You don't want her upset. Do you think she wants you upset? Probably not. Good luck to you. I hope you get into the college of your choice and chose a career that will make you happy.
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