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Story ~ Great short story you've got here! Planting trees that help sustain life, as mother nature does her thing, both bringing hope and desperation to the village. Characters ~ The little girl who prayers every day that the seeds will take root and grow into trees. She was faithful in her prayers, until she got sick and could no longer go down on her knees and pray. Her mother takes up in her place of prayer when the daughter could not. And then the father, who doesn't pray for rain, but only asks to save his daughter and wife. Very heartwarming. Issues ~ Every comma was in its perfect place. Nothing stopped the flow of this piece, and every word you chose helped move the story forward. *green* Impressions ~ I really enjoyed this story and was impressed how much information you able to put into the short word count. Great descriptions of what the mother looked like after her hard days work in the field. There was hope and sadness throughout, and then of course the greater miracle that brought the entire village outside. Just when things seem to be at their worst, the mighty heavens above deliver the call and restore what the people need the most. Congratulations on having this one featured in not one, but two newsletters. Well deserved. Write on! {c} "Game of Thrones" by Creeper Of The Realm
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