Hi I Love WDC! Cissy❤ ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a nicely spooky poem, dear author. I noticed that it was written in the lead up to Halloween, and it fits the mood of the season very well.

You make good use of all those things that creep people out - the creaking floorboards, ghosts, the witching hour, the darkness, the bogeyman, shadows, screams - or wanting to scream and not being able to. All those triggers that both delight us in novels and movies, yet make us want to hide under our duvet right after watching/reading a story of that kind. Our imagination runs wild, then, and a sudden perceived sound, or sight, makes our hair stand on end. You have captured that in your piece.

On the technical side of things, your poem reads well. I like the rhythm and flow. It's well-presented, with a pleasantly readable font.

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Stanza 1:

In the first line, "aged old" should be "age-old".

In the third line, "floor-boards" can be written as "floorboards".

In the last line, there's an extra space after the quotation mark that can be removed.

Stanza 3:

In the third line, "enfolds around me" might be worth looking at. If the darkness is enfolding you, it's wrapping itself around you. So, the word "around" isn't needed there. To maintain the rhythm, you might want to use something else.

Stanza 6:

In the final line, "suppose" should be "supposed".

My Rating:

I liked this poem. It's nicely written.

I did have some suggestions, though. Nothing major, just some "beauty errors". For that reason, I will give your item a rating of 4 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .