Hi Renee Trenton ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is an interesting poem, dear author. It definitely made me think!

It is true that we all have different sides to us, and that those sides can be in conflict. Sometimes to disastrous results. In complex situations, which side do we follow? The good can overrule the bad, but sometimes the bad can overrule the good. It works both ways.

Of course, there's also a hint at mythology here. Four heads do feature in mythology, like the four heads of Brahma, for example (though he had five at one point).

The poem also speaks of loneliness, and desolation. Recognisable themes and feelings. And that sometimes we destroy that which we hold most dear.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It's easy to follow and has a pleasant rhythm.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, and that's to do with consistency. At times, you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. At other times, you don't. That gets a bit confusing, so I would choose one or the other. Personally, I recommend letting it depend on the individual sentences, as that aids overall clarity.

My Rating:

A strong, interesting poem. I am glad that I found it whilst browsing through your portfolio.

I did have one suggestion, but that was more of a beauty thing. So, I will give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .